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First proper haiku

First proper haiku

Blossom, baby pink
With subtle tones of white shades
Cause of death, winter

◄ Obligation

Monsters ball ►

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Alan Summers

Tue 7th Jun 2011 17:53

Hi Charlene,

I hope you keep writing haiku! ;-)

Here's a contemporary haiku from me:

cherry mist
the gun you pointed
as I said I love you

Alan Summers
Publications credits: Symmetry Pebbles (2011)

n.b. 5/7/5 seventeen syllables is an urban myth unless you write in Japanese.

This is a useful site about why you needn't worry about 5/7/5:
http://sites.google.com/site/nahaiwrimo/home/why-no-5-7-5

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<Deleted User> (5011)

Thu 14th Apr 2011 11:17

lovely Charlene, exotic feel to it.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 14th Apr 2011 09:46

Glad I clicked on this to read it properly, because the front page doesn't show the line structure properly

Great first haiku!

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