First proper haiku
First proper haiku
Blossom, baby pink
With subtle tones of white shades
Cause of death, winter
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lovely Charlene, exotic feel to it.
Glad I clicked on this to read it properly, because the front page doesn't show the line structure properly
Great first haiku!
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Alan Summers
Tue 7th Jun 2011 17:53
Hi Charlene,
I hope you keep writing haiku! ;-)
Here's a contemporary haiku from me:
cherry mist
the gun you pointed
as I said I love you
Alan Summers
Publications credits: Symmetry Pebbles (2011)
n.b. 5/7/5 seventeen syllables is an urban myth unless you write in Japanese.
This is a useful site about why you needn't worry about 5/7/5:
http://sites.google.com/site/nahaiwrimo/home/why-no-5-7-5
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