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Sonnet III

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This was written after a trip to Marakesh, ok so I've used orange, I know!

 

Once seared by heat marrow changes form,

Air so arid, dry, tasting like school chalk

Epiphanies evoked through eyes of scorn

Can't comprehend these aren't Lancashire folk

New cultural laws, awareness I lack

Minaret dominates a seething mass square

Women in black robes tongues making a clack

Facinated by his gold flaxen hair

Souuks smelling of fresh patchouli and orange

Disorient both mins, soul and senses

Camel leather on stalls haphazard, arranged

Pungent tangs breakdown English defences.

Both cultures misjudged by lack of language

Return to the desert without anguish.

Summer ►

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 14th Jul 2008 15:48

Hi Louise, yes it's a different world! I've been to Tangier and nearly went to Marrakesh (its a long story!), so i know what you mean. You've really given the reader a good picture of the culture of the country and the difference in what we're used to! Enjoyed it, thanks Jeff

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Louise Coulson

Mon 14th Jul 2008 14:43

Sorry! Glad you felt welcomed and it's good to see you there as a regular x

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Louise Coulson

Mon 14th Jul 2008 14:42

Thanks Janet I would recommed it but it was a culture shock for me plus I was travelling on my own with my son, which raised eyebrows amoungst the Moroccans. It was lovely though and a great experience

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Mon 14th Jul 2008 14:30

Hi Louise, i must say i did think it strange that i've never seen your work on here during the time i've been on the site. Not long.
You were the liaising person at my first wol gig at wigan and you made me feel welcome and gave me a good slot for a beginner. Thanks.

I've never been to marakesh but your sonnet provides good imagery alongside my own imagination. I love patchouli n orange. Warm, exotic fragrance.
Janet.x

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