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Sunset

Drowning in a sea of tragedy,

engulfed by relentless waves of

heartache and despair,

I fill my lungs.

Burning deep inside as I am

removed,

loose-limbed and euphoric,

I fall towards the blackness of release.

Numbing cold creeps through

my waning heart, stopping the hurt

and I cry,

tearless and relieved.

 

The last light of the day is always the prettiest.

◄ Stronghold lost

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Andy N

Fri 20th May 2011 08:08

loved this, Kath.. You may want to think about a split from 'I fall towards the blackness of release' as there seems to me like it could benefit from splitting the stanzas there, but either way - loved it...

hope you are good x

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Francine

Thu 19th May 2011 20:45

Exquisite.
It can be felt like an exorcism.
I often go sit near the water to watch the sunset... and I feel so free : )

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