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A flatful of dust

My sunlit screen’s all obscured by bright dust

Like blinding snowflakes frozen in mid-fall

The sun moves westwards as it always must

And now I’m finding that I can see all

As shadows mount the white screen and white wall

Goodbye sun, you’re no friend to thought process

You bring too much reality; you crawl

Into each dirty corner, dark recess

Training a spotlight on each filthy mess

Spilt food that’s hardened into yellow crust

In kitchen. Look at the floor in the hall

Such biodiversity. I’m impressed

Victorian-style cleaning maids, please just

Line up outside until you hear me call

◄ Barbecue blues

Two aspects of loneliness ►

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<Deleted User> (5646)

Wed 23rd Jul 2008 21:46

The dust i can cope with, just about.
It's the bloody mites that get me, little blighters.

But apart from that, love this sonnet. I can't think of a better word than Sandres, "classy", so i'll just put "very" in front.

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Jeff Dawson

Wed 23rd Jul 2008 13:31

Hi Antonio, like this, know what you mean, well described though. I've got laminate flooring and a cat which doesn't help! Jeff

<Deleted User> (3509)

Tue 22nd Jul 2008 23:39

Hi my lad , you always write so well. I love your rhyme. It's classy.
as of yourself, a class act. Keep it up.

<Deleted User> (4281)

Tue 22nd Jul 2008 06:27

Hi, Antonio

I was impressed with a thing like dust to create a poem out of it, and you certainly did. Impressive write! You know that the dust particles are more visible when the sun shine is on...There is never ending job with dusting. I have the same problem here. Try your best and in the morning the dust sits again especially on a darker surfaces...Thank you for the interesting poem...Enjoyed reading.

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

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