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Little Digmoor

Midge Lilt Root

The street names dance like tautograms

And uneven grey grounds make the feet likewise

Rumba, foxtrot to mashed potato

You’re footfall is distinctive here.

Abandoned shopping trolleys, line the streets by young joy riders.

The vines don’t dare to wrap around them

The vines where never there anyway

Bricks are scarred with graffiti

Children as pre-undereducated fools.

And the motors fly down the carriageways

Tom died last week, look there. Do you see the football shirt?

And his flowers smell of diesel and musk.

You feel the grudge from the men that live here.

I’m covered by the bus stop, dodged the glares.

I’m hidden by the advertisements

Which I subsequently read, whilst clinging to the posts.

And everyone’s a stool pigeon at the Mucky Duck

Hitch hiking on their pensions for a glass of Guinness

The barmaid wears cheap hooped earrings

A present from her incarcerated lover.

She has that coarse voice from premature smoking

She tells me her life.

And I leave her a tip

The motors fly down the carriageway

The bus commuters see Tom’s wreath

The faces fill with blue rain.

And they catch spilling’s in their handkerchiefs

There there, that’s enough.

Enough for the evening bus home

Through the Perspex windows

◄ Emily

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Andy N

Mon 25th Aug 2008 20:30

I love the image about 'Blue Rain' in particular.. Nice piece.. Not sure whether I could call it poetic prose or a poem, but it is good!

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 3rd Aug 2008 16:34

Hi Sean, what a superb poem, like a tribute in short story, lovely - love the lines

And everyone’s a stool pigeon at the Mucky Duck
Hitch hiking on their pensions for a glass of Guinness
The barmaid wears cheap hooped earrings
A present from her incarcerated lover.

Just one thing and its only me being pedantic, it should be - Your footfalls and - vines were never, it just interrupted the flow of a great poem -

Great lines though, very poignant and sad at the end, but a moving finish, look forward to more, cheers Jeff
Loads of great lines

<Deleted User> (3509)

Sat 2nd Aug 2008 08:42

A very poignant poem

'you feel the grudge from the men that live here'

there is a tangible reek to disadvantage. Your imagery is startling and thought provoking. I enjoyed reading this.


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Val Cook

Fri 1st Aug 2008 20:59

A good poem Sean. Lots of word pictures and full of meaning, Tom must have been a friend.

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