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Nocturne

Constuction had begun

On a four story country home.

Five fathoms from the lake.

A catalyst of shadows

From my bedroom window.

 

And when the staff called:

"Lights out!" I'd climb

Down from my window and walk

Through the fields of stars

Where nightbirds hissed

The gentle rush of my path.

 

It was quiet in there

On a bioclast chair

Among cement and insects

Huffing petrol from a sock

Trying to forget the future.

 

But now the house is built.

The insects have given up on it.

All the dead insects leaving their home

With nothing to show for it.

 

And now the nightbirds hiss

For someone else

Lost in the untamed shades

Of another's future.

◄ Excerpt from novel.

Keeping You Warm ►

Comments

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Noetic-fret!

Tue 19th Jul 2011 19:50

I gots to say this in a streetwise kinda way to imbue upon you how good this work is, so i just wanna say,

FEKKIN DECENT KEALAN, FEKKIN DECENT.

ahem! Sorry about that, fantastic work kealan. just absolutely fantastic.

Mike

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Fri 15th Jul 2011 22:56

love it Kealan. B

Philipos

Thu 14th Jul 2011 23:04

Some really fab descriptions here - like to paint night scenes myself in verse - they take on a momentum all of their own

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Laura Taylor

Thu 14th Jul 2011 10:11

This initially put me in mind of Iris Murdoch's 'The Bell', but then took another turn completely.

Out of everything I've read from you this is the one I like best so far. Incredibly evocative, can even smell the petrol (not often you see 'huffing' in a poem - nice truth detail).

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