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As I Leave

We sit and talk about everyday things

the things which annoy us

you don't like the puddles rain brings

it soaks you upto your knees

Your loneliness seems to be my bliss

cause your feeling alone

I enjoy your kiss

I heard you cry for the first time last night

quietly

your tears scarred my eyes

When they come to take me away

i'll say I cannot leave

and if the time may come

my final day

I wish you comfort

as you grieve

We all must pay a service to this place

we can only hope

Our service doesn't come at a cost

when the battlefields have burnt away

the soldiers will be lost

a sealed envelope may decide my future

the words that are written on the page

mean were too late

 

Kiss your eyes

and leave

take care

I hope to see you there

 

Kiss your face

and leave

and leave

be well

Treat yourself well

 

We sit and ry to figure out what it all means

how far does the universe go

will a parallel universe allow us to live out our dreams?

I try to anticipate the sadness

Sound out the screams

We all must go away and leave

at least once

to a place

we don't know

feelings of alienation when we go

 

Kiss your eyes

and leave

take care

I hope I see you there

let go of your hand

and leave

i'll write you poems on the moon

and hope my return comes soon

As your hand drops from mine

I'm lost in my own mind

the right words

impossible to find

So easy to say something small

the tear that fell to my palm

says it all

◄ Dsyelxic? I tihnk not!

Timeless Finity ►

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Andy N

Mon 25th Aug 2008 20:38

I think this is a poem that needs a couple of reads to let everything sink, which I guess is usually a good thing! Interesting......

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Sun 3rd Aug 2008 22:35

Hi Richard,
There are parts of your poem where i became, not a little confused.
"Your loneliness is my bliss,, cos you're feeling alone, i enjoy your kiss." These words make sense in that one persons being alone can be bliss for another, probably due to not getting enough time for self.

The 2 small stanzas, somehow left me bereft.
The sealed envelope sends shivers down my spine but the ending is fabulous.

Great to see you back. love Janet.xx

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 3rd Aug 2008 17:36

Hi Richard!

We sit and try to figure out what it all means
how far does the universe go
will a parallel universe allow us to live out our dreams?

Brilliant, been thinking the same thing, only got frustrated and wished I hadn't bothered!

This is a great poem, too many good things to list, lovely lines though very thoughtful and very poignant, great stuff Jeff

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