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Timeless Finity

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Standing

alone,still I wait

my silence shattering

still, calm like the dead sea

Has time stopped for me,slowed

No! But I accelerate and time slows

We are too mortal for this infinite universe

That star I see in the sky is from a time before I know

We are too isolated in existence to learn

The truths and secrets that she holds

We speed up and we slow down

she slows and she quickens

in a timeless sphere

she's in control

leaving

 

 

Eternity

is she eternal

world of such force

we shall not see its end

she will continue on her jourmney

Expanding. Inflating. Exploding. Provoking

She loses.She gains.Implosion.Another black hole

Her life long enemy. They must share the endless galaxies

The creator created a world far too powerful

a world constantly at battle with itself

the mobious strip has spoken

an unknown crossover

standing unaware

disappearing

 

 

Journey

into the abyss

weightless, float through

the past.Present.Future.New world

Dark matter controls the endless skies

Escape the event horizon and distorted images

Will we ever move and live in a sister universe? Survive?

Will she show us the ancient secrets science searches? Truth?

Every beginning must begin a timeline. Tip the hour glass

The beginning. A middle. An End

Passing doppleganger's

the omen of death

Are we close?

she'll decide

Time

◄ As I Leave

Taste The Day ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (5646)

Tue 12th Aug 2008 22:04

Hi Richard,
Oh i do love the essence of this poem, and the shape. Well!!
It's said that there are thirteen crystals resembling diamonds in the world.
If six of these come together, our universe will implode. ( you just made three of 'em.)

Peace = Pleasure Experienced by Accepting all Creation as it Exists.
Love Janet.xx

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 12th Aug 2008 21:59

Pps shouldn't it be Timeless Infinity? (dont know if type error, delete this whatever!)

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 12th Aug 2008 21:53

Hi Richard, this is excellent, I've ofte thought about the end of the universe, but there can't be one and that does my head in.

Love the concept and the spaceship dimension of the stanzas, great stuff. Just one thing, the second stanza looks like a line short at the bottom, should there be one word to balance up to 15 lines like the others? Something like 'away' or 'fast' ?

Anyway, love it cheers Jeff ps you would love Carla's groovy socks, I've amended it slightly too, cheers

<Deleted User> (4235)

Tue 12th Aug 2008 20:21

First off, I love the formation of your poem. Secondly, I love its essence, the spirit of time.

No matter how advanced we become, the endless skies of the galaxy will still remain far out of our reach, bending every belief and theory of what it contains, and allowing our dreams to touch its stars.

Love the poem. :)

darren thomas

Tue 12th Aug 2008 14:23

Concrete poetry? Very, very good. The shape of the words reminded me of the playing card the three of diamonds, as well as the UFO's from Close Encounters...

<Deleted User> (4725)

Tue 12th Aug 2008 13:46

Love the structure, fanta-nomenal
(a new word i just made up, combining the words fantastic and phenomenal)
Like the way you think.

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Richard Brooks

Tue 12th Aug 2008 13:17

A bit excperimental after reading 'Farewell' by George Wither and my current fascination with the size and extent of the universe

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