Numb
In starry circles elevated
at Olympian floors
I have hyperventilated
on excursionary tours,
beheld our images dilated
in mementoes and encores
as we bathed intoxicated
behind visionary doors.
All things become outdated
given time enough, of course,
and my feet drag to the drum
now that I am numb.
With a fluency of language
(unintelligible babble)
I spoke ecstasy and anguish
to uncomprehending rabble.
I'd renovate the damaged
carried to me from the battle
and deconstruct their baggage,
hoist them back into the saddle.
But the eloquence has vanished
and the road is too well travelled;
shellshock has struck me dumb
now that I am numb.
I played the part of Casanova
when possessing the charisma
with a hand up your pullover
and an eye upon my finger
as it fastened to your shoulder,
as it waited for the whisper
that implored me to be bolder.
Since the fall has welcomed winter
and the blood is running colder
so I dither and malinger
in the fear that I can't come
now that I am numb.
Ray Miller
Fri 15th Jul 2011 20:14
Thanks, Steve. It's not really worth the effort is it? No comments on the poem, the suggestions made on the poems of others are unwanted. I know, you know that it isn't to do with either the quality of my poem or my advice.The vast majority of folks on WOL aren't interested in constructive criticism.
I'll live with it or leave, I guess!It's only poems.
Football! There's no Villa fans looking forward to this season. Who do you support?