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Fine Line

Many roads run through this world,
and we all live parallel lives.
No life is lived easy,
and there is no fine line.
And we just drive,
hoping to make something out of ourselves
and find a reason
why we are here,
why we must live this life.
We are dealt a hand of fate,
a card of destiny,
and we all choose sides.
Some play the soldier,
saving lives,
but are they truly rewarded
or left behind?
Some choose the good samaritan,
but do they succeed in helping
or blamed for interfering?
The rest are strangers
cruising past others
on this walk of life,
and some keep a blind eye
to those circling them.
But others stop time
and spend their moments
in selflessness.
We are all actors
on the stage of life,
and life will
always be complicated,
a jagged road
through this world
that we live through.

Fine Line

By, Melissa R. Mendelson

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Comments

<Deleted User> (4281)

Mon 18th Aug 2008 23:11

Dear Melissa

The poem has a lot of psychology in the body of the write. You are trying to find ways and answers to subjects that at times we are not able to conquer alone. It is thought provoking write. Your thinking leads the reader to stop and contemplate why we are here for, it reminds of the song that been sang by R.U.S.H. a Canadian Band - 'DREAMLINE'


He's got a road map of Jupiter
A radar fix on the stars
All along the highway
She's got a liquid-crystal compass
A picture book of the rivers
Under the Sahara


They travel in the time of the prophets
On a desert highway
Straight to the heart of the sun
Like lovers and heroes,
and the restless part of everyone
We're only at home when we're on the run
On the run

This is something in that sense...They are trying to find the way as you are searching yours....Great poem!!

With my best wishes!

Zuzanna
xx

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Richard Brooks

Tue 12th Aug 2008 16:52

An excellent poem questioning life, you've touched on existentialism and nilism here I think. I feel a sense of absurdity in whatever we choose to do when you ask if a soldier is ever really rewarded

<Deleted User> (4446)

Fri 8th Aug 2008 18:49

really thought provoking. Great Stuff!

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clarissa mckone

Wed 6th Aug 2008 05:11

HI Melissa, I really enjoyed your poem. You always craft them so well. So full of deep thoughts. It really shows what kind of person you are and that you have a heart of gold! take care clarissa

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 5th Aug 2008 22:22

Hi Melissa, love this, so many challenging thoughts skilfully put -

Some play the soldier,
saving lives,
but are they truly rewarded
or left behind?

How true and all we can think is why to all of this. I'm writing something with a similar thought behind it, poem quite different though. But yes, enjoyed this, will read it again!

Thanks for your kind comment about my 'Seasons' poem. I'm sorry Melissa but I've changed the photo while I was amending some of the words after feedback! You will see why if you have another look, I've improved poem and pic is more reflective, Jeff X

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