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Girl in a Lake

 

on heavy eyes the full moon cast gilded shadows

swan path shafting seductive to the shore where

she dropped her clothes and entered liquid light

jewelled feet icy lustrous pale arms high uplifted

 

now wide eyes of unwavering clarity enraptured

dream-wooing  dream-possessed  she sank gleaming

to her knees in the bitter midnight water open palms

thrust upward - reaching - offering - beseeching –

 

through her hands she felt sweet vines tumble upon

white breasts mellow blossoms shining wetly eyes

fixed the blinding  moon enchanted  ravished  black

mass mounted the shuddering lake a nervous breeze

 

whipped the water invisible leaves slipped  into gobbling

waves drooling tongues licking  snatching at her frail

nakedness pushing silken thighs against hunched rocks

aghast she reared from their sucking mouths stumbled

 

back to shore where

trembling uncontrollably

she folded her clothes

over her mind

 

 

Cynthia Buell Thomas

 

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Jeff Dawson

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 00:15

Naughty and very nice, good stuff Cynthia

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Dave Bradley

Thu 28th Jul 2011 18:48

Blimey! Thoroughly enjoyed this. Rich, luscious language. Interesting structure. Cor!

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Tue 26th Jul 2011 17:24

very clever, ropmantic and centres and focusssed and good

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Laura Taylor

Tue 26th Jul 2011 10:08

Wow

Read this through 3 times now. Admire how you manage to paint the pictures with your strange grammatical structures. Ethereal as well as primal in the uncontrollable sexuality of her surroundings, and how it reacts to her.

Love it!

Philipos

Fri 22nd Jul 2011 20:21

Hi Cynthia this is so evocative - water on skin makes the reader feel like a Peeping Tom. Guess many local lakes are legend rich - locally we have something called the Silent Pool complete of course with the legendary maiden myth.

'Folding her clothes over her mind' a metaphor perhaps for post hanky panky guilt! Yes, of course, re read, your added comments which do imply that.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 22nd Jul 2011 17:01

If this poem was on before - apologies. Sorry about two poems one right after the other, but I didn't want to let the category just slip by, as I did with the voting last time.

I've always thought 'goblins and fairies' are euphemisms for 'libido'.

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