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Mourning Dawns

 

A mourning dawns like a black sun,

Slipping like a shadow through the heavens.

Unseen, it is not caught by the sky and

In three days it will touch the earth once more.

 

Below a woman facing west waits.

For the second time her waters have broken, for

She has cried her heart dry, but it has not cracked.

Her hope will be the beacon that brings him back.

 

Above a father stands staring south.

As the sun crosses the sky, he does not stop it,

But lets the warmth leave him. For he knows that people

Are re-born when stars guide them through the night,

 

So no crying he makes at the dying of the light.

 

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Comments

Scott Devon

Wed 17th Aug 2011 18:40

Hello Philipos,
thank you for your comments. The last line is a deliberate hybrid composed of a Dylan Thomas quote and a reference to the Christian line which goes, 'and the little Lord Jesus no crying he makes'. I am attempting to draw a link between the birth of Christ and his death, because he is about to re 're-born' by overcoming death. That is why the last line reads that way.

Philipos

Wed 17th Aug 2011 16:58

I enjoyed this Scott. IMO to avoid an inversion in the last line, it may read better thus: 'So he makes no crying at the dying of the light'

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John Coopey

Wed 17th Aug 2011 09:45

V powerful, Scott.
I'm intrigued as to whether the word "starring" in the 3rd stanza should be "staring" - but then again, don't tell us - the ambiguity adds to the mystery.
The final line is very Dylan Thomas-esque.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Tue 16th Aug 2011 23:27


once again-faultless IMO.

much enjoyed.

S.W.

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