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PERSIAN PUNCH - the death of a great race horse

Persian Punch found a secure place in the affections of the racing public - always trying his

best.  And when he collapsed and died in the final stages of a race at Ascot the sorrow was immediate and heart-felt.

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Brave eyes wept at the Ascot course

When he came to the end of his run;

For the going down of that great horse

Was like the going down of the sun.

 

Brilliantly, he had brought the light

Into so many days,

And now he'd fought his final fight

Before their grief-filled gaze.

 

But when the sun comes up each dawn

To ease the human heart,

We will recall the heart that was born

And beat in a horse apart.

◄ CRAZY WORLD - a song lyric

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John Coopey

Mon 31st Oct 2011 21:44

Nice work again, MC. Impressive use of abab rhyming patterns in such short lines. I recognise and envy the skill. The rhythm is also self-evident and persistent despite varaiable line lengths. (The mark of a musician).

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