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slowly becoming a disaster

introduction:

"When ‘we’ finally did choose the paint
Silk or matt, it ain’t something
I want to do again, but I know I will and that I have to
all that squatting in the Que
4 hours-just to leave a sodding car park
and at the last minute
my injuries were insulted once more
for
the sprogs declared a desire for ice cream
-the sods poured it all over leather.
and then it started raining again."

despite the downpour
optimistic people trudge deluded
the open sandal shoes
mostly middle age
mostly starting to lose all hair
middle class
pairs peering out
over stacks of double glazed glass
his n hers
debating their desires
arguing the toss
on gas stoves or electric fires
lets share the artificial flames
the backdrop to the perfectly arranged
aisles of choice.
and
The heartless manipulators and security guards
Watch from sonic sockets
Their smoked Perspex spheres hide cameras
They scan for bulging pockets
then zoom in on you
cleavge loving pervs
Empower themselves with security
They make
Cold eyes
And demonstrably devise
New and invigorating ways
In which to stimulate us.
Themselves so mindless and voyeuristically bored
Parallel run the lines and shelves
Parabolic the mirrors
Demented the minimum wage elves
Stacking row upon row
For endless pockets we delve
For things we don’t really need
But like any hob knobbed biscuit greed
We lap it up anyway
And feel guilty
As the guarantee that came with these consumer disposables
Did not include greed or stupidity.
The push bike exercise machine
Made in korea
Lasted only seventy nine miles
Or was that your tolernace for diet
it never happens and he pats the fat
gets
tugged by a child
realises that
this: this is  all he will ever be
this: it is all he is ; all he ever will be
unless he wakes up
from what is slowly becoming
a disaster.

not 100% happy ►

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Francine

Fri 15th May 2009 00:45

This last part is so poignant because sometimes people get to a point where they look back on their life or circumstance, and sadly feel this way...

'this: this is all he will ever be
this: it is all he is ; all he ever will be
unless he wakes up
from what is slowly becoming
a disaster.'

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Seamus Kelly

Tue 30th Sep 2008 09:03

Hi Pete,

Just to confirm what I said the other night when you performed this one in Midd. You have the kind of insight into life that means we all recognise ourselves and our feelings in your writing. You say what many of us want to say, and you say it with style. Love it. Keep em coming

Shay

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 29th Sep 2008 22:55

Nice one Pete - good to see you mentioned me- cleavage loving pervs!! Ha cheers Jeff

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clarissa mckone

Sun 28th Sep 2008 03:51

wow, well much of the world is a disaster, and many follow it. seems you enjoy watching people, so do I. They are fasinating.You know he may be perfectly happy with his life. consumer greed is a real problem, but they shop to try and get happy, and it does not work very long. I see it everyday.

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