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clouds of happiness

A spat out biscuit
Lay beside my bed
A last minute decision
That I had been over fed
Comfort eating again
Anything to blank it out
Anything to ease the duvet slide
And the inevitable clout
That is living
The mars bar
Was far too far to reach
The calorific content
Can confidently teach me
That it is junk food
Just a sugar hit
To glaze over
The reality of everyday living
Should I find strength
To roll over
To reach it
Cursed I would be judged
By the silent observers
The devil on my shoulder
Who watches
He takes pride
In colour swatches of right and wrong
A kaleidoscope of guilt
Sat aside I don’t belong here
I should be in clouds of happiness

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winston plowes

Fri 15th May 2009 01:11

Hi Pete

Not going to comment on content but on structure for a change. Started out like a Cayn White poem! And then after the word "clout" it changed to your usual rhyme half way through the next line mode. Liked the change in gear. Win x

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Francine

Fri 15th May 2009 00:54

I love the idea of 'clouds of happiness'...
Do it within reason... one must indulge occasionally though ; )

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Sun 28th Sep 2008 10:47

Hi Pete,
and a spoonful of sugar makes the medicine go down....
Nowt wrong with a sweet treat mate.

Loving your poem.
Janet.xx

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clarissa mckone

Sun 28th Sep 2008 03:31

Hi Peter,
I enjoyed this poem. you know its not a sin to eat yummy things from time to time. I like the whole poem. I love kaleidoscopes, not full of guilt though, full of memorys and happy.

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