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MOORE, EMIN AND KOONS

 

I was sitting quietly at the bar with a pint of bitter

in my right hand and I was about to bring it to my lips

when a skinny man, wearing a trilby and knitted sweater

sad “you like art. Want to buy something as cheap as chips?”


On a red flatbed lorry with a crane at the back

was a bronze sculpture weighing at least 2 tons

Yours for £1,000.” What could I say but “yes, I'll take it.”

It's in the garden where cabbages, potatoes and peas grew.


I was sitting quietly at the bar with a pint of bitter

in my right hand and I was about to bring it to my lips

when a skinny man, wearing a trilby and knitted sweater

said “you like art. Want to buy something as cheap as chips?”


He passed me a postcard of an unmade bed

from the Saatchi Gallery. “Got it out before the fire.

Yours for £1,000.” What could I say but “yes, I'll take it.”

It's in the only bedroom. I sleep on the couch downstairs.


I was sitting quietly at the bar with a pint of bitter

in my right hand and I was about to bring it to my lips

when a skinny man, wearing a trilby and knitted sweater

sad “you like art. Want to buy something as cheap as chips?”


Under the sheeting was a 6ft microphone made

of high chromium stainless steel with colour coating.

Yours for £1,000.” What could I say but “yes, I'll take it.”

It's in the lounge and just fits. Mind you I can't open the door.


Next time that skinny man wearing a trilby and knitted sweater

approaches I'll tell him to piss off. Unless it's a Hirst or Calder.

◄ AND THE WORD WAS PIZZA

AT 18 ALL I WANTED WAS A TACHE OR BEARD ►

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Philip Golding

Thu 16th Oct 2008 20:45

I was sitting quietly at the bar with a pint of bitter

in my right hand and I was about to bring it to my lips

I like the way these lines lead the reader through, but I found I needed to read it a number of times to understand it.

Thank you for your comment re Eliot's 'Objective Correlative


One possible criticism of the objective correlative is expressed by Michael Witkoski in his article “The bottle that isn’t there and the duck that can’t be heard: The ‘subjective correlative’ in commercial messages” [2] when he says: “The objective correlative also allows for more abstract, less immediate connections…”. Yet another possible flaw of Eliot’s theory includes his assumption that an author’s intentions concerning expression will be understood. This point is stated by Balachandra Rajan as quoted in David A. Goldfarb’s “New Reference Works in Literary Theory” [3] with these words: “Eliot argues that there is a verbal formula for any given state of emotion which, when found and used, will evoke that state and no other.”

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Philip Golding

Thu 16th Oct 2008 20:27

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 12th Oct 2008 23:44

Hi Rodney, sometimes you just cant say know! Different I'll say that but I like it in a strange way, cheers Jeff

ps thanx for comment on "Gamblers of Today"

darren thomas

Sun 12th Oct 2008 17:46

I enjoy refrains in poetry - in a suitable poem.
I think that this is a suitable style and theme for the subject matter.
Given the context that the line 'cabbages, potatoes and peas', appears, it reads Ok to me. It's not as if you're trying to create subtle nuances with your words and their meaning. This appears to be a more direct style from you Rodney. Not hiding inside semantics, I mean, 'I'll tell him to piss off' has very little scope for interpretation or ambiguity. This is more to do with the overall theme and its surreptitious meaning.
I would however, be tempted to add the word 'once' before the word 'grew'. This adds a syllable and rounds off the metre.
(As I read it anyway!).
Cheers

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sat 11th Oct 2008 13:07

Hi Rodney,
Love the "cheap as chips" line.
But sorry, i feel you didn't need the repetitive verse in between and cabbages, potatoes and peas would have been better served up as "vegetables."
That would allow a eader to create their own imagery?

Love Janet.xx

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