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Dune

 

She is brave enough for any brand

tilting the earth, running into the show of hands,

a fast orange lust.

 

The hours send widows,

their shortness carried on the sands,

this way and that, all things passed –

ferocious concubines.

 

In movement, they delight

and show her the close of love –

a hill the shape of falling into

the count of infinite things -

the grains; small lips of the sun,

waiting for

 

each drifting low

and quick viper sex, and then the death -

an indigo

curled pursuit,

who wears her shoulder, cold and bare. 

 

 

 

 

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Tue 7th Feb 2012 10:48

Thank you Cynthia - I am always touched by the things you take from my work. x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 5th Feb 2012 12:56

I'm not sure I understand much of it; but I love the atmosphere, the geographical and cultural feel of the Middle East I get with the images that you use. I presume you are tapping all the 'background' ideas associated with 'sand'. I think the last line is marvellous; 'her shoulder, cold and bare' may just be an exposed limb after fast, productive intercourse, or not, so plausibly real and metaphorical at the same time. Your work leaves much to the reader. That takes real skill - enough to titillate, not enough to dictate.

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