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Fate Modern

There are trees of peculiar shape

at the bottom of my garden – branches made strict,

glued

with magpie feathers

and an ungodly green bottle neck

trunk.

 

They wink in the sight of a distant sun –

sanded down, a rare pink hue

but pistol gripped,

and a hot diamond snap

over the horizon.

 

My throat is sore –

swallowing, corseted,

and inaudible.

I put my hands to my mouth,

lips burnt with paracetamol,

and feel the sneer of red within.

 

Something tells me the outside

is closing down.

The pond is still, greased with silver

bloated fish, their bellies to the surface –

formaldehyde jellies –

and their mouths, tender,

stripped of sound.

 

I have an urge to run to the sea.

 

The grass is gone. A copper cough

and heavy –

my boots shock; the weight

I hold somewhat sickened,

muscles pulled down

and embalmed. I feel

a metal constraint –

 

my ribs, when I breathe,

and my hip bone

knotted at my side.

The colours of my sleeve

read an algae yellow

and the count at my wristwatch –

 

something from which I cannot bear to part.

 

 

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 24th Jan 2012 13:07

The dream world is amazing, isn't it? Some dreams I can analyze realistically, with a bit of a mental recap of the previous hours or days, but others slip through. The human mind is the scariest thing I know - all else pales - the untapped, unleashed power of it!

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Tue 24th Jan 2012 09:37

Thank you for the comments folks! This sort of stemmed from a dream I had - they are either just plain stupid dreams or scary apocalyptic ones.

Thank you for your words Cynthia. The painting is just for my profile and because I love it but... I wonder...

I do mean 'bear'. Thank you for pointing that out and will change it! x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 23rd Jan 2012 20:31

An enticing formidable read. 'and feel the sneer of red within' is just plain fabulous, among many. How does the painting fit in (a striking picture)? Have I missed entirely a 'sexual union' metaphor? The poem seems much more than that. Your poetry reminds me of the use of 'distortion' in the art world, to evoke feelings, with kaleidoscopic images that seem to reshape before your eyes. Or something like that.

BTW, do you mean ...'bear' to part? Or is it a deliberate play on words?

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Rachel Bond

Wed 18th Jan 2012 18:27

another beautfully wrriten description of something half way imaginary and real. i love that x

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Gray Nicholls

Tue 17th Jan 2012 22:48

particularly like the way you build up to that last line standing alone from the rest of the piece, but it's a very strong piece i think otherwise.

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