What I Miss

Friday 24th October 2008 5:37 am

What do I miss?
I miss the days,
where my father laughed more.
I miss the times
that I saw my mother's happiness.
I miss those
no longer here with me.
When I think
of my life,
I don't miss
how I once was.
I was so blind
so many times.
I was so naive.
I let myself get hurt.
That girl so long ago
has become the woman
that I am now,
and I sometimes hate
being hard, cold.
And there are moments
of my life,
where love came my way,
and I missed the opportunity
to take it into my heart.
And that is something
that I'll always miss,
and now I wonder
when will love
come my way again?

What I Miss
by, Melissa R. Mendelson

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<Deleted User> (4446)

Sat 1st Nov 2008 10:38

thanks for sharing these feelings.

darren thomas

Tue 28th Oct 2008 20:26

Hi Melissa - I cannot argue with the sentiment and emotive choice of language that you are using. What happened is obviously very personal and deep within you. However, I do get that feeling that I have read this before. Not in a plagarised sense but in a sense of repetition. It maybe the choice of words - most are the type we expect to read in a poem of this sort and that can be off-putting to some readers. Not all, as the other comments show. Yet we need to be mindful of is that 'a sense of loss' is the fuel for many, perhaps too many ,poems.
How can we make ours stand out from the wallowing, maudlin crowd and still be sincere? Well, if I knew that one...
You know I enjoy reading your work and it's obvious others do too.
Let's run naked through a 'Webster's' and see what fantastical words follow our lead!

clarissa mckone

Tue 28th Oct 2008 04:04

Hi Melissa, I enjoyed this very much. I do understand this poem and your feelings very well. all good things come in there own time, all things worth anything will come.You dont want fast love. You want real love, a friend, a person with whom you can talk to and be friends with and grow to love and count on. Whne your not looking, it will happen. so live and be the beautiful you, and be happy. It will happen. your friend clarissa xx

Jeff Dawson

Sun 26th Oct 2008 13:17

Hi Melissa, can feel your regret here and the last 7 lines could have been written for me, and to make it worse i was my fault. But you (like me) have to accept at some stage and move on hopefully, best wishes, love reading your work as you know, Jeffx

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sat 25th Oct 2008 11:32

Hi Melissa,
I can relate to some of your thoughts and feelings here.
I believe missed opportunities are not for dwelling upon. When pure instinct becomes too strong to ignore. That's when an opportunity shouldn't be, but once you've taken action, if it isn't appreciated, all you can do is let it go.

Love and light,
Janet.xx

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