solemnity
Once you had your images.
Cardiac tamed by the smile
behind the name.
Secrets that you’ve
hymn drawn
to your later
arrow eyes.
You are my pen
after the punishment.
Once you had your heart,
But it came out garbled.
Comments
Hi Steve, If you mean reading the stanzas in reverse order, then yes I just tried that and think it makes for a better result.
Graham, Glad you liked the results. At least you don't spend half your time running down blind alleys.
Ann, I'm afraid I don't have the unedited version. It was a sort of instantaneous thing. I will send you the orig (before translations however)
Thank you for popping by. More experiments to be posted soon.
Win
How on earth do you come up with this stuff Win? You make me feel so pedestrian! It works well too.
Regards,
Graham
I'd like to see what it was like before you edited it Win. And the exisiting text also. Very enigmatic! I like
"You are my pen
after the punishment."
especially.
These words were created by taking one of my existing texts and translating it into French and back to English using Google Translate. Then into Greman and Irish. Then edited. (This process has been called Hyena poetry). Win
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C Byrne
Sat 28th Jul 2012 17:49
this is great. thanks for the repost. is the original online?