Grandad's Feet
Are long and
broad
and tell a story
of their own.
But I can
only remember their
safe carriage of my small
childish feet
dancing step by step
in time,
seeming so large and remote.
Now they’re just
average-sized.
Are long and
broad
and tell a story
of their own.
But I can
only remember their
safe carriage of my small
childish feet
dancing step by step
in time,
seeming so large and remote.
Now they’re just
average-sized.
<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 11th Jul 2012 20:12
One of the neatest,nicest poems
read by us in a long time.
Thanks.xx
I like this a lot, but somehow the last two lines don't quite work. I know what you're saying but for me it needs even more of a punch.
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Alanna
Mon 15th Oct 2012 23:55
Thanks very much for your comments - not sure about changing the last 2 lines, but an interesting prompt to look again at it.
Alanna