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Artist in residence

 

Every Sunday, your soap opera’s weekly omnibus ;

winning the council flat,

battling the filth left by a procession of slatternly tenants

like exorcizing a stubborn demon.

So my telephone imagination

expects a plain face to a tuneless voice,

but beside the front door geraniums and herbs cling

to the upper story’s cliff face,

inside your rooms wear a bespoke suit’s grey and white chic,

finished with baroque flourishes.

Now I understand your niggling pain,

that this home’s tenancy might be withdrawn

like a Greek god’s favour.

◄ Funeral Crasher

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fiona sinclair

Mon 6th Aug 2012 07:07

Yes Ray , it is an upper storey flat

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fiona sinclair

Mon 6th Aug 2012 07:06

HI to all , thank you for your wonderful comments. Cynthia....I was thinking of a new way of expressing luck or fate and thought of Greek god's who give and withdraw their favours at will especially Hercules who knew when the gods were no longer with him.


Fiona

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 5th Aug 2012 15:13

Fiona, this is a great poem, hitting squarely the individual's battle for beauty in the most diverse circumstances, and the real problem of having preconceived notions about anyone or anything. I don't get the full impact of the first two lines. Would you explain the fuller meaning to me? The title is superb, full of innuendo.

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Ray Miller

Fri 3rd Aug 2012 10:57

Nice poem.First line's good and I like telephone imagination.

but beside the front door geraniums and herbs cling

to the upper story’s cliff face,

I found this confusing - the front door is on upper storey?

Don't think you need "inside" before your rooms.
Nice finishing line.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Thu 2nd Aug 2012 20:06

Well titled
well written.

what more can we say?
except-
hope you are well Fiona.xx

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