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songs I learned with you

I ASKED THE MAN
TO STEP ASIDE
BUT HE PUSHED ME DOWN MY OWN
GRAVEL
DRIVE
LEAVING ONE MAN HIGH AND WILTED
I TIP TOED BACK ON TILTED TEARS
THEY STREAK MY FACE IN HARSH CAREERS
OF LEARNING
i CANT BELIEVE SO MANY THINGS
IN FEMALE FORM BRINGS SINKING RINGS
OF RIPPLED WINGS
WITHOUT LOVE

I CANT BELIEVE HOW HE MOVES IN YOU
CANT BELIEVE
THAT YOU PUT ME  THROUGH
AFTER MANY YEARS MY LOVE ACCRU
I COUNTED THE MOMENTS
AS I WANTED TO
EVERY ONE A PRECIOUS MINUTE
AND THEN
I SAW YOU WALK
DOWN THE ROYAL MILE
I SAW HIS LAUGH PAINT ON YOUR SMILE
AND YOU LEFT ME COLD AND TWISTED

I SUNG A SONG
I LEARNED FROM YOU
BUT THE NOTES BROUGHT PAIN
LIKE MISSING YOU
SO I DOWNED ANOTHER
AND LIVED A HAZY HOUR

THE ALCOHOL BIT MY REASON HARD
BROUGHT VIOLENCE IN THE FLUTE
GLASS SHARD
AND I STAGGERED SOUTH
IN THE LIGHTS OF CARS

EVERY DRIVER WANTING TO REMOVE ME

BUT OBLIVIOUS
THEY KNOW THAT PAIN
IN THER OWN WORLDS LOSS
ITS JUST THE SAME
SO WHATS THE POINT
OF SHARING WITH THEM

THEY ASK ME TO REST MY LEGS
TO STABILISE AMONGST THE DREGS
AND I SOMETIMES FELT FLASHES
OF CONTENTMENT
FOR IN THE ALLEYWAYS I FOUND MYSELF
WITH DRUNKEN COMICS
AND THE OFF THE SHELFS
SEEMS LIKE WE ALL SHARE SOMETHING DON’T WE

ALL MISSING YOU
ALL TORN APART
ALL HOPEFUL FROM THE VERY START
THAT CLARITY WOULD COME FROM BOTTLE
BUT ALAS THE LIE AND LIVER FRY
THE FISH TALE WHIP
OF THE GUILTY DRIVE
TOO LATE TO CHANGE MISTAKES
NOW I GUESS SO
SO ILL LEAVE YOU WITH
THE SOBER THOUGHT
THAT IF ONE THING HERE
IS EVER TAUGHT
ITS HOLD TO SOMEONE WHEN YOU CAN DO
FOR ONE DAY PASS
THEY MAY NOT BE  THERE
YOU MAY SIT UPON HER EMPTY CHAIR
AND WATCH THE HOUR EBB AWAY
AND IF THAT’S CASE
YOULL BE JOINING ME
ON MY LONELY RAFT
OF MY SODDEN SEA
SINGING SONGS I LEARNED WITH YOU

◄ from beginning to end and back again

Jamima ►

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Francine

Sat 23rd Jan 2010 00:52

Fantastic Peter!
I wish you had done an audio on this one.

I love these lines...

'I SAW HIS LAUGH PAINT ON YOUR SMILE
AND YOU LEFT ME COLD AND TWISTED'

'I SUNG A SONG
I LEARNED FROM YOU
BUT THE NOTES BROUGHT PAIN
LIKE MISSING YOU
SO I DOWNED ANOTHER
AND LIVED A HAZY HOUR'

xxxxx

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Chris Dawson

Fri 19th Dec 2008 17:32

Difficult to give voice lessons online but if you want me to write down a few exercises & professional tips that will help with both speaking & singing voice - give me a shout. Do you play anything?
Cx

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shoeless

Fri 19th Dec 2008 10:23

yes pete , i think change it to lower case , just to make it easier to read ,if nothing else . and it will make it easier to see or feel the song . carole x

Pete Crompton

Fri 19th Dec 2008 10:09

hi thanks Janet, CJ Clarissa N Gus

Gus, they wen tfor a city break in edinborough the wife and her new lover, so hence the royal mile.

caps font was a mistake but also i was angered, i think the poem needs to be back in lower case

i like the poem
some minor tweaks i need to do, just noticed now whilst reading back

its actually written in the form of a song and CJD has spotted that bravo.

i can sing some parts, but my singing voice is mainly comical, although i can falsetto

i have practiced some coen and dylan songs but need coaching, i think i can sing just certain parts ok.

love
pete

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Gus Jonsson

Thu 18th Dec 2008 18:14

HI PETE WHY THE CAPS FONT>>>> A REFERENCE TO EDINBURGH>>>>WHY?>>>LOVE THE POEM>>
REGARDS
GUS

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Chris Dawson

Thu 18th Dec 2008 07:27

Had to comment again because I forgot to say - I think this needs music with it. Rather Dylan-esque, I thought.
Cx

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clarissa mckone

Thu 18th Dec 2008 05:05

Great one Peter! Not usual style for you, but a nice change! Hope its not true.xx

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Thu 18th Dec 2008 03:48

Hi Pete,
A bit of a boxer, years ago but I've been hurt
more outside the ring than in it ie love!! liked
this poem, it gets stronger as it moves along,
nice rhythm, hope you go the distance!! cheers.

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Thu 18th Dec 2008 03:44

<Deleted User> (5646)

Wed 17th Dec 2008 23:24

Oh for Pete's sake!!
You're not so down trodden.

Love the sentiment in this though.
Janet.x

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Chris Dawson

Wed 17th Dec 2008 23:20

Wow! - sorry - inane comment - just speechless............... Mine took my music from me for the longest time - only just getting it back - I can't last a day without my music but it hurt me almost as much as he did.
Superb.
Cx

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