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Beryl's laugh

 

spills out of the cafe

bouncing off formica tables

wreathed in steam from pint-sized mugs of tea

rolls out across the concourse

to dance in autumn sunshine

prancing round the buses that will leave

from this place no-one’s heard of

to another one no-one knows

 

and the drivers smoking cigarettes

and the mothers who are barely more than girls

and the old slow men with arthritic hands

in suits that fitted bigger selves

and the women with their bags of value shopping

and the lads whose work is part-time 

stacking shelves

and it’s shit and they know it

and the girls they want to impress 

who make out they don’t care

 

they stop

all of them stop

 

because here

for these few golden moments

in a precious afternoon

Beryl laughs down a benediction

a blessing on a thin, tight-belted town

she hoots an absolution, a defiance, and a joy

and unpaid bills are forgotten

and ends that won’t be made meet are forgotten

and dead dragging hours are forgotten

as Beryl’s laugh spills out of the cafe

 

and everyone feasts and grows fat

as best they can

on the memory of the taste of the promise of dreams

as the sun shines

and the drivers stub out cigarettes

and the empty and unnoticed buses leave.

◄ Rumbled.

No-one likes an angry poet. ►

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Anthony Emmerson

Wed 26th Sep 2012 13:05

Hi Steve,

Great title and a sharply observed piece of writing. One of those unlikely rays of sunlight stabbing its way through the uniform grey clouds of life. Enjoyed very much.

Regards,
A.E.

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Ray Miller

Fri 21st Sep 2012 17:09

Hello Steve. I wasn't suggesting the scansion was a problem but the grammatical sense. We try to "make ends meet" but I'd have thought "ends that won’t be made meet"is in need of "to" before meet?

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steve pottinger

Fri 21st Sep 2012 16:37

Hi Sid! Glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for your suggestion for amending the line, but I'll leave it as it is - it scans right when spoken. All the best.

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Ray Miller

Thu 20th Sep 2012 11:03

suits that fitted bigger selves, hoots an absolution
excellent stuff and enjoyed the poem.
Maybe "ends that won't be made to meet"?

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steve pottinger

Wed 19th Sep 2012 18:28

Thanks, Lynn!

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Lynn Dye

Tue 18th Sep 2012 21:19

I enjoyed this very much, Steve. I agree with Laura on the best lines. Good one.

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steve pottinger

Tue 18th Sep 2012 20:53

Thanks very much, Laura. It's always great to get feedback, and I'm really glad you enjoyed it so much.
I'm always looking for more gigs, btw, so if anyone you know is looking for a poet.... ;-)

all the best

Steve

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Laura Taylor

Tue 18th Sep 2012 15:00

Howdy Steve - I love this. You have a lovely turn of phrase, these lines are great

and the old slow men with arthritic hands
in suits that fitted bigger selves

Beryl laughs down a benediction
a blessing on a thin, tight-belted town
she hoots an absolution, a defiance, and a joy
and unpaid bills are forgotten
and ends that won’t be made meet are forgotten

You deal with the working- and under-class day-to-day really well, and as someone who is a part of it. There's truth, and empathy in your poems, and a hard-edged reality that I totally connect with.

Thanks for another great poem :) Would love to see you perform some time.

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