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Fish

The evening paper and the scuffers

brought revelation. Sammy wasn’t even

his name I discovered and the prayers  

I’d offered were misplaced and useless

or somebody else had stolen salvation.

He wore Ben Shermans, Doc Martens

and a Harrington jacket but a uniform  

isn’t a suit of armour and a five-inch blade

punctured his stuffing, left him clutching

at nothing, writhing out of his element.

Dreams of vengeance were only ephemeral

and after all he was more lighthouse than candle;

a warning of rocks not a star to follow.

I shredded Ben Shermans, buried Doc Martens

and denied all knowledge of a Keith;

not a name you’d fashion into a religion

though I like to think he died for my sake.

◄ Pareidolia

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Ray Miller

Thu 4th Oct 2012 10:28

Thanks, Greg Freeman. The title has some religious connotations but also alludes to a body writhing out of its element.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 3rd Oct 2012 23:05

Sid, I saw this poem a couple of days ago and meant to say then how much I liked it. The rhythm seems nigh-on perfect, the words clever and crafted. Baffled by the title, but religious connotations, I'm guessing? Anyway, excellent stuff.

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Ray Miller

Tue 2nd Oct 2012 11:19

Thanks, steve black.Gratitude is Heaven itself.I can see a curious line break or two. I'll do summat about 'em.

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