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However it may seem.

 

 

Like a fish out of water, that analogy.

Why does it sometimes always apply to me

When I try to say that simple phrase today?

Why do I always feel that you won't believe me

When you know my feelings, and there's no deceit

You say "I know you do", if my  words make it through.

 

Sometimes it seems a little bit easier now,

But I still can't say it anyhow,

Well here I go again with the unspoken refrain.

 

And I could kick myself, bang my head against

that proverbial wall. What's the matter with me,

what holds me back, what always makes me stall?

 

Because however it may seem to you, you hold

me up and you pull me through. God knows where

I would be if you weren't there.

Because however it may seem to you, what looks

like disregard is far from true. What I'm trying to

say is just how much I care.

 

 

 

 

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David Blake

Fri 8th Feb 2013 17:12

I like the final line; it brings the whole piece to an abrupt yet fitting end. Putting something into plain words can sometimes have the biggest impact. Good stuff!

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Ged Thompson

Mon 24th Dec 2012 01:45

AHHHHHHH

Thats lovely, well done mate

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Nick Coleman

Wed 5th Dec 2012 18:13

The stronger the feeling the harder it can be to verbalise and risk the put down.
Too many walls.
"I Know you do"
"I do too"

we have to allow ourselves to be seen — really seen.

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Matthew MNtality Jarvi

Mon 12th Nov 2012 16:07

I feel you.
To have a passion so strong,
yet it's seems like it goes unnoticed. "unspoken refrain"

thanks,
-MNtality

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sat 27th Oct 2012 22:06

We enjoyed this Tony,albeit aimed
at a particular person?

Hope you dont mind us pointing out
that it might be best to use either
'sometimes' or 'always' in the first part
not both.

And same applies to first line,second part-
leave 'now' out as it clashes with 'sometimes'


Good poem nevertheless
despite our nitpicking-
(done on a friendly basis of course!)

Best regards.
P.&S..xx

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