A seat
Empty beside me
The distant glow
Of the fires below
Your spirit in the smoke
Does form
I nuzzle into
Your right shoulder
You hold my head
And kiss my cheek
“It will be alright.” you smile
Yet the tears still fall
I blink and look again
you are not there at all
© Katy Hughes 2012
Inside the smoke
Is a spirit
You inhale it
That is why
When you look
He has gone.
So much happening within so few words.Brilliant !!
Very compelling. 'Your spirit in the smoke does form..' is lovely. And I like the stanza layout.
Was there a specific reason for the 'right' shoulder? Other than a connection with 'alright'? IMO, I thought the soft 'oa' sound carried the emotion well, like sighing and mourning, without the sharpness of 'right' at that precise point.
You might double check whether 'all right' is still the accepted spelling, although 'alright' is certainly casually used.
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Mikhail Smith
Mon 19th Nov 2012 22:36
- Katy, here's a testimonal from Bahrain Air web -
"The aircraft is clean and in a good condition it’s in excellent situation, the crew is nice good and friendly. For sure I will let all my friends know that it was wonderful flying with Bahrain Air and I would like to fly again because of such nice crew and such competitive rates". -
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- There was no need for you to cry Katy -
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