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Pearls and Swine

I met a girl in the corridor

she walked tall with limbs long

chestnut hair stroked her perspired fore

while through the air called softly a song.

 

each note formed round a lightening tone

her eyes stretched to see beyond me as she spoke

between her and the distance sentences had grown

into a lily scent with perfumed oils awoke.

 

she tripped with pleasure perfect poetry

caught as a gift straight from the gods

prophesied a miracle coherently

then settled for a moment to hear her sound begot.

 

She sat in a waiting room until they called her number

'how are you?' the Dr said.

"as radiant as the sun settles with its clouds around the dawn unemcumbered.'

'Oh good then?' I asked dryly and sarcasm shook its ugly head.

 

I walked away and worried with my own particular neurosis

and wondered which Id rather be

Speechless in sickness,

But quiet

As another corridor approached us.

 

◄ lucky.

40 rats. again. ►

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Rachel Bond

Wed 12th Dec 2012 20:00

hi laura...no excuses,you sound like morrisey with his stitches...brush down the poetry coat and get it on :)

glad you got the joke :)

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Laura Taylor

Mon 10th Dec 2012 15:12

Some wonderful lines in this Rach - love that second verse, and am liking the humour you've brought in to it too

See you Thursday! I was going to dress up but I've got fuck all to wear ;D

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Rachel Bond

Fri 7th Dec 2012 14:33

thanks jeff glad you like.

ste, i like these film meetings that you combine for comparison. im happy with the description...:)

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Jeff Dawson

Wed 5th Dec 2012 13:55

Like the classic style you've written this in Rach and the change in direction midway through to bring things down to Earth. Sounds like a prickly atmosphere after your comment to the girl, and great last line, leaves everything open to imagination, good stuff X

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