María en la Roca (Sewage Filter)
I saw the face of a woman in the rock
It was etched into the heart of
A tall black cliff and I marvelled
For that face, was yours.
It was head-height, cold, unseeing
At the black water that gushed below
The bile of hell washed from its eyes
Like a solemn sacrifice.
It becomes a prison in my mind, but
I can only see irrelevance where
The boundaries meet.
I hope not to flail before this effigy of nature
But I see escape in every rivet in the basalt
A cave beneath the deep where the shingle prowls
A tempest lurking frenetic beyond midnight.
And I hide in some dark catacomb
Where the shadow of yesterday recedes
And comfort creeps sterile from blue sky.
For now this heartache lives
In the nightmare, that refuses to take leave
An imagining that can only be re-captured
In the height of the storm.
David Blake
Thu 7th Feb 2013 00:05
Thanks for the feedback Isobel. Yes, the bit in brackets isn't very good really, I agree. I wrote it ages ago where I used to put alternative titles in parentheses.
With this title it was more an image-association thing with me so I understand must be difficult for anyone else to follow. That's the trouble with me not having really shared my poems much up to now, in that I can't really get a good sense of what I'm doing right or wrong.
You're right about the title. But it was more of an image-poem here rather than following a clear meaningful narrative, which can sometimes backfire with me. For people who like certainty and not just messing around for words, I guess this poem isn't going to be their thing.