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I'd like to see this on the page Pete.
From hearing the poem a few things come to mind. One is how well you perform the poem, another is how the occasional rhymes work so well. In a sense it allows the listener to be led up the garden path; never quite knowing if rhyme will be given or denied. It's very satisfying to the mind.
Content wise a passion and some undoubted quality. In terms of performance; a passion is clear and engaging. I have in-depth experience when it comes to some of what you speak of; the bit that I know well - you articulate a truth. And whilst I'm not sure and maybe the listener can't be sure, truly where you are on belief - it's enigmatic and thoughtful.
My Best
Chris
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Pete Slater
Thu 21st Mar 2013 08:40
Thank you Chris for your comments. I am an accidental poet and have only been writing for 2 years. Having no idea of the structure of poetry as such I simply write. It is encouraging to have other opinions.