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swimming underwater


I caught a moment
when I could hear every sound

at that moment
the world seemed to make sense
like a teacher
had sketched a diagram
on how to feel the world
with your eyes closed

upon eyelid open
the image as clear
as the sound
ripples
a comfort
on the tiled ground of the pool
the water surrounded

soothing
and necessary

perhaps I should
curl
like the calm moments
of a wombs world
yet strength asked I push forward
into the dapples ahead
as though my purpose
was to seek out
rather than recluse
I felt cured
and recalled the words that said
to occupy myself living
to fix thought on growth
to be honest on the oath of who I am
despite the ones
that distract
wasting effort
trying to derail
for the light she sends,
like always,
prevails.

I surface refreshed
hoping the moment will endure
I look out for the storms

take her warmth with me.



21-2-2009
for Melanie.
 

◄ Concorde over St Catherine s Dock 1981

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Francine

Fri 8th May 2009 23:13

J'aime beaucoup ce poème... surtout ces lignes:

'yet strength asked I push forward
into the dapples ahead
as though my purpose
was to seek out
rather than recluse
I felt cured
and recalled the words that said
to occupy myself living
to fix thought on growth
to be honest on the oath of who I am
despite the ones
that distract
wasting effort
trying to derail
for the light she sends,
like always,
prevails.

I surface refreshed
hoping the moment will endure
I look out for the storms

take her warmth with me.'

Très inspirant...

<Deleted User> (5812)

Sun 22nd Feb 2009 18:05

fabulous poem, Pete. each moment described and guided through with a beautiful serenity i'd love to be able to replicate. soulful content. lovely x

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Gus Jonsson

Sun 22nd Feb 2009 14:45

Well done Pete...my sort of poem...

loved it
Gus

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clarissa mckone

Sun 22nd Feb 2009 05:13

nice poem

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Noetic-fret!

Sat 21st Feb 2009 22:40

Hello Pete, your an inspiration. I wonder how long you been writing to reach this standard. I read it a couple of times and each time i found something new to ponder on. Yup! Fine wordage blue.
Mike

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