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Paradise

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On soft warm sand I lie

Feeling the heat of the sun caressing my face.

Cool light breezes lifting my hair

Seagulls calling

And the rhythm of the waves pummelling the shore.

Tempted by the clear blue ocean

so cool and inviting

I recline on a soft cushion of sand as gentle waves lap at my breast.

Suddenly a huge wave enfolds me and I tumble

Into the foam,mouth and nose fill with salty seawater

 I am carried out into the boiling surf.

Then gentley lifted supported by the swell floated  towards the shore.

Unable to find my feet, sucked back

into the maelstrom of white water

Time and time again.

Never finding the strength to stand or escape the perpetual pounding

I  succumb to float in the warm surf.

Buffeted by the sea, eyes closed to the glare.

Cooled by sea spray

Floating between heaven and earth

In tune to the sound of the sea.

Val Cook 2006

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Comments

<Deleted User> (5812)

Sun 1st Mar 2009 16:20

a sensorary delight of a poem, albeit in my imagination, you're words and imagery are lovely x

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Val Cook

Thu 26th Feb 2009 16:46

Rodney these monsters come from no where in the sea off Western Australia. Thnak for your comment

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Rodney Wood

Thu 26th Feb 2009 15:56

This was almost very good. But I couldn't reconcile the waves pummeling the shore and them gently lapping at your breast. Overall it could be tighter.

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sian howell

Thu 26th Feb 2009 00:18

I love the images , the idea of lying in the shallows - all so gentle ..then the overwhelming power of the waves and the sense of giving yourself up to the ebb and flow ...just wonderful. sian x

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winston plowes

Mon 23rd Feb 2009 21:27

Hi Val
I was all relaxed until half way through! then woah... liked the relaxing start, the end and enjoyed the ride in the middle. Winston

Pete Crompton

Mon 23rd Feb 2009 16:45

a nice mantra
this visual imagery
we can all
use
when we need to be
in another place

so warm Val

thanks x x x

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