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A TINT

If the world was black and white ... YACK !!! It just wouldn't be right ..... Would it? .....

A TINT.
When I paint.
Do I taint
The words I use?
When I write.
Do I abuse
The paint I choose
To colour my world?
Its beauty unfurled.
With each brushstroke
With each word that’s spoken
A moment broken 
By the sound
That’s bound
To echo into nothing
But paint sticks
So paint it thick
As thick as the brogue 
You use to speak
Let words leak with ease
Onto a poetic breeze
A moment in time
Captured
In two dimensions
Without a mention
Of how it got there
Only a hint, a tint
Borrowed from 
Colourful imagination.
© By: -Pete Slater. 2013.

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Mike Hilton

Fri 27th Sep 2013 14:29

Nice one Pete

I totally get why you put it in this format.
It reads as it sounds and it flows in the right directions for me.

Right up my street!

Mike

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 26th Sep 2013 16:08

I do like this. It seems that the faster one reads it, the better it sounds, because the rhyme scheme takes over, and your very imaginative ideas seem to 'brush in' together.

Would you consider a different pattern of lines, one that would highlight your rhyming? Or is this a deliberate effort to do exactly NOT that?

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