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RIGHT OF THE UNCONCEIVED

 

 

Consider all the unconceived, they neither toil nor spin

Till called upon by selfish act of grossly unoriginal sin.

You read those lines and smile, perhaps, at whimsy’s gentle play

But Human Rights’ first law should be: ALL life may life gainsay.

By inference those who have reached cognized fertility

Should bow before the unconceived – the being yet to be.

And just because this noble truth employs enigma’s guile

Remember paradox and life upon each other smile.

Go forth and multiply with care, there is no greater sum

Than man and woman’s conjoined parts that add another one.

And what is more our infant is brought forth scarce half made up

With primal needs as yet unmet – not even half a cup.

Thus, here again, the Human Right to mother’s nurturing

Stands pledged in blood since two indulged conception’s roistering.

 

 

The Devil’s helpmeet Mother Nature never crying halt

Has youth respond to hormone drives, and fertile by default

But Mammon’s take on children changed, since chimney’s finger beckoned

He stuffs with silver, mother-mouths, it stops them being fecund.

Connivance by society, devalues mothering

Potential mothers wed the job, and take the bovine ring.

Led by the nose they seek to be more dumb by far than men

To strive and strain in his domain to be as dumb as ten.

They buy with birthright, Mammon’s beads, and do not heed the signs

Success feels good (or does it) as fertility declines?

At last they can afford a Nanny - and the IVF

Mechanic’ly some laboratory grants that ‘late-conceived’ first breath

Lactation is eschewed - it interferes with Mammon’s plan

Big Pharma dries her up - the more - with profit and élan.

 

 

Gestation’s bliss leads on to birth - at best calamity.

As parents sought a home, now newborn craves security.

The debt to this new life is way beyond all mortal measure

Secure Attachment of the child should be the prime endeavour. 

But mother must return to proper work, not mindless nurture

The anxious child must learn to cope respecting mother’s future.

If God intended mothering why would he have made minders?

They see to children’s needs beyond stay-at-home mother’s blindness. 

Be sure: multiple substitutes are better than just one!

While stuff bought with mum’s earnings, ensures life is well begun.

Security, in time, will be transmitted by osmosis

Prime time with drained, yet fulfilled, mother, fends off all neurosis.

Thus will the child take in truth, that ‘income maketh man’

And pays for pills and therapy, affording ease of pain.

 

 

At two the Nanny State aligns with Mammon’s master plan

To master any tendency to be an also-ran.

The child now part-acclimatised to part-abandonment

Adds to its repertoire the skill of school without consent.

School ‘uniform’ surrounds the child with institution’s drape

That, if resisted, gathers in, until there’s no escape.

Here self-awareness and self-worth are gently ill advised

Each generation in their turn is institutionalised.

And no one now can understand that ‘school’ means but ‘to gather’

So many have gone through the mill, real thought is too much bother.

Much stuff is learned, designed to aid the doing side of life

But Husband Studies languish, and none learns to be a Wife.  

And so it goes: as heavens turn, we spiral down in expertise

Life-skills abandoned, usher in, a nation ill at ease.

 

 

Maturity is dead and gone dragged down by cleverness

The balance tipped too far, its kilter now beyond redress.

Condemned to die still juvenile - by wants and needs consumed

Mankind quite blind to his own plight, exuberantly doomed.

Philosophy not currency, psychology short shrifted

And ‘wood from trees’, brings ‘Mote and Beam’ especially to the ‘gifted’.

Quite disconnected from the Earth, polluters, decadent;

Pursuit of leisure rules, yet insufficient to repent.

And loud the un-conceived cry out for undivided bliss

They wring their un-configured hands, craving connexion’s miss

Will bind them in Nirvana, spurning three score years and ten

Unbloodied and unbowed without so much as half a yen.

Perhaps it’s with the unconceived, lies Wisdom’s gift to know

That we are just a rotten shoot The Tree needs must outgrow.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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◄ RAGE OF INNOCENCE (All due respect to Dylan Thomas)

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barrie singleton

Sat 26th Oct 2013 11:12

That'll do nicely Bella. Rage against the damage man has done to life and planet from the angle of Ma Nature - mmmmmnn. May I throw in a WoeMan or two? Their guilt is large although we men LET THEM DO IT. (Two wars, spaced one generation apart, massively implicated.)
Oh YES! Harry dun good. Nailed the whole thing. What a star! Thanks.

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Isobel

Sat 26th Oct 2013 10:57

LOL - okie doke - I'll blow you a very un-poetic kiss then x

You'll have to do a rage against life poem one day - written through the eyes of Nature and exploring man's dogged determination to live and strangle the life out of this planet....

See? The only way I'll ever really button up is to rip my own tongue out!

Getting back to the poem above, I do love Harry O'Neill's comments on this too - worth reading after you've read the poem, peeps.

x

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barrie singleton

Sat 26th Oct 2013 10:48

Oops! Really no intention to come over as a terminator Isobel! Just showing my ignorance (not for the first time) of WOL protocol.
Buttons do not suit Cinderella. (;o)

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Isobel

Sat 26th Oct 2013 10:27

Stacks of our comments on this site aren't about the poetry Barrie - because thoughtful poems just inspire thought.

I'm happy button up now though :)

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barrie singleton

Fri 25th Oct 2013 23:36

Big subject Isobel. It is hard to get much of a perspective in the span we encompass. Agreed, Nature is basic and single minded - continuation of the gene-line. Nature carries out more abortions than any other agency! And then hammers the survivors with a range of debilitating and lethal impacts. Any moment, some puritan might notice this is not a poetic discussion. Should you want to email I can easily be found. Culturally yours. (:o)

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Isobel

Fri 25th Oct 2013 23:23

Nature is a cruel beast :)

I happen to think that men aren't physically or psychologically programmed to stay with one partner for life. Society demands it though, and many do, though it's probably the source of great internal restlessness for them.

Can you imagine what our society would be like if Nature was allowed to dominate? Unthinkably bleak for women :(

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barrie singleton

Fri 25th Oct 2013 23:15

Total acceptance of your reservations Isobel. I think I have posted before that I ask: "What would Nature do?" This leads me to the dangerous assertion that "Nature loves stereotypes!" I never bought 'equality' only equivalence. Culture must reinforce Nature for a sustainable continuum. We have got all muddled up with 'growth' and 'progress'; consolidation and stasis look better to me.
I see a dipole of cleverness and wisdom (probably yang and yin respectively); we are way up the clever end. I think I have 'of Beds' on my profile list - I wrote it when the when the realisation struck that I - as a proven inventor - am just the sort of person who restlessly forges ahead DAMAGING THE EARTH AND ITS LIFE-FORMS. Mea culpa.

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Isobel

Fri 25th Oct 2013 22:35

A very clever piece Barrie - I'd agree with Cynthia that you have done a lot of mulling over this one.

'Connivance by society, devalues mothering'

This was my favourite line - not so much for its poetry as its truth. I don't think many people acknowledge just what an important job mothering is within our society. The benefits it brings are collective ones - and not so easily plotted on a graph.

I have mixed feelings about some of your beliefs. Keeping women in the home is all very well if you have men who can step up to the responsibility of being life time providers - which in some cases involves sticking around - in other cases, them not getting seriously ill...

In any society women have to be armed for whatever might happen and the likelihood of divorce being that much higher, you just have to prepare your girls for more than child rearing.

Current population figures don't give rise to concern over our ability to procreate either... in fact I think they are forecasting a huge shortage of primary school places...

Great idea for a poem though - tracing the whole rage idea back to its earliest possible origin.

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barrie singleton

Fri 25th Oct 2013 21:47

Respect Harry - deep respect. You have it all: nub, nuance and notion. Such a thorough commentary is as good as it gets. I'll pop round to your place and see what you have been up to. Thanks.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 25th Oct 2013 21:11

Barrie,

I was fascinated by what I take to be the air-clearer follow up to your `Rage of Innocence`. ( The connection of the foetal doomed with Thomas` dad at t`other end oflife was satirically excellent – as was the contrast of `prying` with `dying`) Making it a `proper` villanelle would have taken the fire out of it.

This one concentrates more on the reasons for our present meagre child-bearing and it`s connection with the demands of industrial prosperity. Your points about the `default` fertility and the change that the `Chimney`s finger` brought about is succinct history, and the stuffing of the `mother`s mouths with silver` spot on. Also I.V.F. and declining fertility and dependence on the laboratory.

I could imagine the sisterhood seeing a jealous male bitterness in this, but what you are doing is pointing out that females are just as selfish as men (but with a far more serious outcome for humanity as biologically –want it or not – they are the nurturers and far more central to the fate of human kind) No doubt some will tell you that work and kids can be combined – and they can – but it`s the work that must change.

I like that suggestive `un-original sin` and the wise `paradox` smiling on `life`, the `Income maketh man` and that cunning connection between `wood and trees` and `mote and beam`.

The foetus` implications of the Thomas one would need a different set of arguments than this. (I once wrote a whole play about it).

Thoroughly enjoyed the whole thing.

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barrie singleton

Thu 24th Oct 2013 20:26

Hi Cynthia. Time spent mulling almost exactly one lifetime. Your diligence in extracting and pondering much appreciated.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 24th Oct 2013 11:13

This has much to say and you have obviously spent a lot of mulling over it. The premise is quite interesting, using the 'unconceived' instead of the 'unborn' - it neatly shifts the emphasis.

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