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Nature`s `revenge`

 

(re-titled, revised and `sonnetised`)

 

At the multicultural fellowing,

The steel-pans softly mellowing,

I watched her for a long, long while,

Dancing with a lithely grace,

Wondering:  `Did she never smile`?

This lady from the far-off place.

 

Then suddenly, like daybreak beaming-

Ivory through a forest gleaming -

Laughter, lightening her face,

Spread sunshine through a shady place.

And sent one shaft, like Cupid`s dart,

Clean through the sinews of my heart.

 

And since, No matter how I crave,

History`s flipped – now I`m the slave.

 

◄ Lines of support for Anne Feradi

We protest ►

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barrie singleton

Thu 31st Oct 2013 00:01

Hey Harry! A chap who applies 'lithely' with such aplomb even panache nay consummate elan, while probably creating a new part of speech (?)
constitutes a formidable (said Frenchwise) opponent! I yield! Apart from that; it's a cracking composition.

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Starfish

Tue 29th Oct 2013 20:49

I love this poem - brilliant stuff!

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Noetic-fret!

Tue 29th Oct 2013 01:13

My wife is a Zulu woman,
You could say we're enslaved to each -
but in essence,
we are king and queen,
And our kingdom?

The smiles of our two, adoring, children!

I like the poem. Nice one Harry!

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John Coopey

Mon 28th Oct 2013 22:19

Aaahh, I think I get the "revenge" now. A romantic twist on black/white slavery relationships?

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John Coopey

Mon 28th Oct 2013 22:17

Still got it, haven't you Harry? I bet you were deadly when you were younger.
Very pictorial, H. MC's right about the structure keeping us on our toes.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 28th Oct 2013 16:14

Intriguing changes of line/rhyme...with rewarding
content and a neat ending.

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