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My Inner Child

I know you've encountered the Angel of Death

She visited you before

Don't worry my child, you will be fine

Your smile will return once more

 

She was taken by the angel

Like a trophy, like a prize

Intangible to you now

Little girl, close your eyes

 

A heart so young, yet troubled

Childhood catapulted to weary unknown

Be strong, stand tall and carry on

You can live this life alone

 

My inner child, of you I am proud

You have my heart, you are my soul

I am here for you, forever

I will make your heart feel whole

 

For you are me and I am you

Together we are one

We love her, she loved us

I love you, little one.

Wednesday's Child ►

Comments

Nelly

Fri 11th Jul 2014 21:21

This is a very interesting and a very different poem. I like your intelligence used at rhyming the words with the ones.
I like the fact that it's short and easy to understand :)

Nelly x

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Phillip Kelly

Tue 8th Jul 2014 01:54

simply unbelieveably good ! perfection !.

the rhyme scheme and structure is superb.

the voabulary is emotive...gained from mix of first person, second person , third person and inclusive personal pronouns....which creates sense of universally speaking out...THIS IS WHAT MAKES THIS PIECE SO INTERESTING !!....and i love the repetitive use of siiles in stanza 2 which increases the emotive hyperbole.

this is my favourite poem of yours ..id love to have discussion about where you got inspiration from...ideas etc.. its written in the style of poet GILLIAN CLARKE, similar to her poem, CATRIN.

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