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THE LONG VIEW (re-post).

The cobbled tongues of off-cut streets
allude to former occupations;
exposed bones in stalled foundations
testify to such defeats
as death and deathless time impose.
The pregnant past may find repose
in printed books; on stones and scrolls;
or rest untouched in vaults and cases;
it may haunt the vaunted spaces
piety imbued with souls.
But, importuning, it confirms
what we consign to dust, and worms,
may not admit its own demise  
but in abeyance simply wait   
for time and temper to dictate 
the novel path of its reprise.    

◄ DARK AND WET ONE WINTER MORNING.

HOW WE USED TO LIVE. ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 18th Jun 2014 12:53

Isn't it amazing how one phrase/idea/jewel-of-my-own-thought haunts a poet until it must be used!

Travis Brow

Wed 18th Jun 2014 07:19

Thank you both very much. However, i admit to doubts about the pay-off. I wanted to include it in a book of poems i've put together and so i feel i perhaps rushed the ending for the sake of inclusion. I've put it back on the drawing board and plan to rework it. Your comments give me pause, but i have to be true to the poem and i think it needs attention.
It sprang from 'cobbled tongues...'; a notion i was pleased to pursue but i think it loses its way. Anyway, we'll see what happens. Thanks again though, your comments are always welcome.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Jun 2014 14:23

Bloody brilliant. The first line is a magnificent hook - 'cobbled tongues of cut-off streets' - absolutely superb, and then it fulfills its promise with every passing line and developing idea. The controlled alliteration lifts your lines off the page. Like Mr Newberry, I find the formal complexity a joy to read.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 14th Jun 2014 16:48

An interesting and entertaining construction - with a timeless message to add to the pleasure.

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