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I used to skip, I used to run,

I sought all pleasures neath the sun,

I walked on water, slew the beast,

Was first and foremost at the feast.

 

The coins I spent each bore my crown,

I stormed the walls and broke them down,

I raised my army for the fight,

And everything I did was right.

 

The wine I drank was mellow sweet,

Proud virgins falling at my feet,

Amassed great treasure, piled it high

Full certain I might never die.

 

I trampled down the baying hoard,

Of lauded Kings I was the lord,

No earthly power could me impress,

I farmed the fields of man’s distress

 

I stood and watched the nations burn,

Their ashes for my funeral urn,

The gods I worshiped prayed to me,

In hope that I would set them free.

 

But now the sun fades in the west,

I know of better than the best,

The wanton charms that I acquired,

Now leave me wasted cold and tired.

 

Those gods I had abandoned now,

I reach out for a different plough,

A straighter furrow, different seed,

Some harvest for my inner need..

 

The things I did secured my life,

But at what price, what inner strife,

Amends to make, a bridge to found,

A footpath steep to holy ground.

 

I used to skip but now I crawl,

My kingly robe a funeral pall,

I seek to grasp that great unknown,

But fail and find myself alone.

 

Still haunted by the cowl and cope,

I reach for faith but find just hope,

But in that hope is some release,

Some pathway to an inner peace.

 

And if I fail what price regret,

I’m still a fish within the net,

The Galilean cast it wide,

And can I swim against his tide? 

 

◄ Robbing Dylan

Singing To The Silence ►

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Val Cook

Fri 20th Jun 2014 18:42

I enjoyed your poem Ian and I agree with all the comments. Good to read a poem that has rhythm and meter.

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John Coopey

Mon 16th Jun 2014 23:04

Always worth a read, Ian. Reflections on mortality and spirituality - the stuff of which poetry is made, and with your customary expertise with rhythm and formality.
Incidentally, if ever you get any more proud virgins showing up and you feel you can't handle them any more ...

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Jun 2014 13:51

This is written with sustained metre and rhyme, presenting a well-respected, universal theme.

My understanding leaned towards Islam with the reference to 'virgins', but was counter-thrown by 'walked on water, slew the beast', and even 'gods' which may refer to East Indian beliefs etc. etc. All of which may be deliberate, or not, hard to say.

The ending was interesting, seeming a 'tongue-in-cheek' poke at some interpretations of the Christian Bible.

I trust I'm allowed to find this piece also deliberately humorous: 'I used to skip, I used to run...'

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 15th Jun 2014 18:18

Those who lament the dearth of verse/poetry that
"connects" and lingers in the mind, need only seek the name of this WOL contributor for reassurance.
I am envious of the consistent quality found in
these many lines.

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Ian gant

Sun 15th Jun 2014 17:46

Fair Comment MC

see alteration and thanks ICG

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 15th Jun 2014 15:37

The content reminds me of the lines about the
ruins in the desert - Ozymandias, king of kings..
This is an impressive piece of work, with much
to enjoy in its progress to completion.
One caveat: I'm not sure about the mix of tenses
in line 1 of the 5th stanza.

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