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Left Luggage

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I smoke and watch her

pack.

The taxi waits.

Then a memory:

her last departure-

and

the scent of her 

unwashed skin-

and

the left-overs

of our arguments...

 

She's smiling as she 

leaves me her echo 

in our space.

She's planning a future

as we fail,

as we fail to finish

yet another argument...

to fail another space.

 

I pick through the remains

of the accusations

that she broadcasts

purposefully.

 

A horn beckons.

Then leaving,

sighing,

she drags behind her

-like wheeled luggage-

the life that we once shared.

 

words and foto  T Carroll

re-worked

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Comments

Preeti Sinha

Sat 20th Sep 2014 18:33

Beautiful and sad, Tommy. Hope she came back :0

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 23rd Aug 2014 22:00

Sorry TC are there some typos in this or am I reading it wrong? Probably me! fail/fill?

Apologies if I'm wrong.

Graham

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Ged the Poet

Sat 23rd Aug 2014 13:54

Great title, photo and the last verse fits perfectly.
'She's smiling as she
leaves me her echo
in our space....
Good play on the words 'fail' and 'space' in that stanza. Seems to underline the severity of it.

Anaya

Sat 23rd Aug 2014 10:51

Funny I wrote about leaving too ;)

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