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The Undies Moment

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Whites
            Colors
Silks
            Buttons
Bows

I glimpse your eyes fixed on me.


Fresh
              Soft
Cottons
              Warm

"Would you like to help me fold?"


Shy
              Smile
Intimate
              Touch

"I thought you'd never ask."

 

© Candice Reineke 2014

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charliebrogan

Thu 11th Sep 2014 00:11

I love this! so intimate and sweet. The structure is great. x

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Candice Reineke

Wed 3rd Sep 2014 22:06

Glad you got it, Daniel :) Aaaah, life's simplest moments.

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Ged the Poet

Wed 3rd Sep 2014 20:24

Such warmth from an innocent and awkward moment. This gave me a great big smile. Nice one.

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Candice Reineke

Mon 1st Sep 2014 21:31

Thanks Alexandra and Andy :)

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Andy N

Mon 1st Sep 2014 12:57

the structure here is excellent. very, very clever. enjoyed this a lot.

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Alexandra Parapadakis

Sun 31st Aug 2014 17:24

I love the way you have structured this, it strengthens the our ability to picture the exchange between the two characters

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