Your love was like an erotic mixer tap
Come to think of it
You never did
Ouch.
Invigorating
But
Ouch, ouch.
Low, medium, fast flow
Optimum temperature
Delivered head to toe
Oh the bliss…
Disconnected the plumbing
Packed away your tools
And buggered off
Ouch again
And oh the smell…
Hi Isobel
Great suff this. Funny and the quirkyness helped by the 1) 2) 3) numbers. something new to me I think (not the on / off scenario, I think we have all been there). Keep posting
Win x
There's good comic imagery in this ... the 'ever changing moods' of relationships, eh? Nice one Isobel.
Hi Isobel,
And thanks for your very generous comments on "lifelines." Your "Mixer Tap Madness" reminded me of something my very first boss once told me - that "Marriage is like a hot bath - not so hot once you get used to it!" I liked this sideways, humorous, gentle look at relationships. Myself, I'm still seeking that champagne-filled jacuzzi experience (someone will probably have tiddled in it before I get there!) Nice one,
Regards,
A.E.
you can edit without removing and starting again , but why not copy them if you are worried , , i think erotic would be better yes :) but it has made me laugh like a drain ( groan )
Very funny.
Cx
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Mon 4th May 2009 18:08
Awash with wonderful momentum -- how beautiful an analogy for an affair that's now water under the bridge. Exotic mixer tap almost sounds like one of those ads that run at the back of The Stage for dancers for middle east show contracts. And thank you for your overwhelmingly generous comment. I write unborn cartoons.
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Mon 4th May 2009 13:29
I agree with your stance on humour!
At first I thought Andy had been messin with the plumbing!
Fun read, great for a pub read too! It will wake em up!!!
Well done
that is a relief , when i read the first line of your comment , i thought you had written it ABOUT andy n :) yes i like this short one from you , and yes its funny ,
This poem was inspired by Andy n (not some arse hole who wouldn't know a heart beat from a TV programme). I enjoyed reading Andy's '3xNew Short Poems' and thought I'd experiment with some minimalist poetry myself. I must say there's a lot to be said for it - I knocked this out in no time! I tried to inject some humour in there cos I find that helps in most situations. If anything ever came out of Pandora's box, it should have been humour...
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Jeff Dawson
Mon 25th May 2009 16:28
Hiya Isobel, thanx for msg. I'm just catching up so just seen this, very funny and I'm sure Andy N will be pleased. If you're having any trouble with your shower and I can help let me know!! Ha, see ya soon Jeff X