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Everyone knew but me.

I wondered why that set
Of Mediterranean sky
Was domed between these whirls of weather we get,


Why - through the jibs
Of the low oaks -  the sun-shafts
Kept digging me in the ribs,


Why I could feel
The shock of spring seas pounding against a far coast
Vibrant under my heel –


The sudden toil
Of all kinds of coming-alive things
Stirring in the soil.


What was it the breeze
Whispered
 As it soft-footed through the trees,


And tried to tell
The clumsy brook,
Clambering down the dell?


I couldn`t understand
Why the old lady, secretly,
Smiled behind her hand -


Why that squiggle
Of schoolgirls down the lane
Started to giggle.


(With the bright
Eye of every child
A twinkling festival of light)


And then the shout
At the town`s edge –
Why was everyone out -


The air
Of coming carnival
 Everywhere?


I could see
There was a joke about,
And it was on me,


By the sly
Chuckles and grins
As I went by.


Then the crush,
With me in the midst,
The sudden hush -


The cleared lane
As all fell back,
Necks a-crane.


Then I heard
A clack of heel on cobble,
Something stirred


And like a clap of thunder
The truth struck –
No more wonder.


For I knew
Who it was round the corner of the street
Would swing – like a sail round a headland - into view.


The sound of her footsteps running on before,
Pounding
At my hearts door,


Vied
With the answer – pounding from within –
I was flung wide,


Left to stand
An open city
At her command.


And so she entered in, and the metronome
Of the past, dead, wasted, time of waiting stopped,
She`s home…she`s home
!

 

 

 

 

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 16th Apr 2015 15:03

This is really interesting - very readable in style and content.I do enjoy your contributions to discussions and your comments on the work of others.

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 14th Apr 2015 12:57

This is the full example of what I was trying trying to do as a mix of (controlled) free verse within rhyme in the old discussion blog.

(I`ve revised it a bit)

Anyone got any other (controlled) examples of a different way of doing it?

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