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A silent, night sky is loud with the city’s glow.
Reflections upon the water; lead thoughts below.
the humming is fuel to the fire,
for the electric, funeral pyre.
Colors show who you really are around here,
there is no time for fear.
Or is there? - where’s little sister?
If you see her, say I miss her.
Wait.
Rain beating down like laughter on my ears;
let’s me know what I hold dear.
<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 4th May 2015 08:23
There's something in here but I'm not keen on funeral pyres in poems and I'd give your little sister the boot. Strip out the obvious end-of-line-rhymes, mix it up a bit and expand your theme and I think you'll be onto something. x