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I CAUGHT HER ON A SOFT TURN

I caught her on a soft turn such that

the sun was moved to laughter,

and all that had life lightened

with the look I gave

and the beat that I felt.

Smooth was the flow of her hip

and fluid as a rhyme.

A flock of birds escorted her in a livening breeze.

No one will ever be safe from such moments

and the grace that I thought was lost.

◄ ON THE OTHER SIDE

POWER TOOLS ►

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raypool

Sat 6th Jun 2015 22:17

It's a pleasure to catch a few thoughts in the fishing line of opportunity, even if you end up with the rubbish....
That line about the birds does maybe add a surreal touch, a sort of cinematic liberty. Cheers for your comments.

Ray

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Sat 6th Jun 2015 20:30

I love the way you throw in a slightly off-kilter line - 'a flock of birds escorted her in a livening breeze' - an added depth and dimension. You've been busy and it's been a pleasure to read your posts Ray.

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