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SELF ANALYSIS

On the life train to depression central

he got off at an early stop -

sadness junction     where choices are made

which track to take      never knowing nor

quite believing in any destination.

The signal wavered as if in sympathy..

And then sadness became his friend,

"welcome to sadness junction," it said.

with this shadow companion he felt at home,

no illusions, no expectations,

a limbo of molten sunset - sadness gained.

Not for him the unified force of pissed pleasure

shared without question

No    -   so many questions.

Any suggestions? he often asked

only to return to sadness with lip read platitude

and irresponsible attitude.

People dug in securely in self - made trenches,

him on the top plain seeing too much to gain

and, but for sadness, he might have taken

that train to depression junction

whose function would have been

a commitment too much.

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<Deleted User> (13762)

Sat 13th Jun 2015 20:35

thanks for posting this one Ray - perhaps in a slightly similar vein to my Junction Desolation? You make the point well -
Not for him the unified force of pissed pleasure
shared without question
No - so many questions.

struggled a tad with the plain / gain line but that's a minor quibble.

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raypool

Sat 13th Jun 2015 11:11

Thanks for your thoughts, Huw. I suppose a certain melancholy is what I was portraying, inevitable in the reflective mind. Depression is the arrival where the last train has left as it were.! Im not sure about the fate aspect... but religious conviction can take over the burden for some. I could go on. Cheers. Ray

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