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beach

Today I took my daughter to the beach

Where water meets dirt

As a great man once said

Where roses bloom too early

Dew droplets

Drip

Seductively

From the petals of youth

Where lost souls

Dreamers

And the dreams they dream

All go to die

To be snuffed out

Where the grains of time

Meet the ravages of age

Where the brine picks out a heartbeat

Tick Tock

Smouldering on the shore

Where the smell of salt

Decay

And Chips

Mingle together

Like guests at a dinner party

Where the air is bracing

Refreshing

Good for you

Or just cold

Where the painted ladies

And muscular gentlemen

Waltz slowly along the pier

Listening to dance music

Wearing neon trainers

And fake smiles

Where the hopes of a thousand lonely teenagers

Have washed out to shore

Alongside cheap vodka

And pick ‘n’ mix

Where every guest house

Hotel

Or bed and breakfast

Is full of people

And devoid of life

I took my daughter to the beach today

We stopped for doughnuts

They were stale.

 

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Comments

Lynn Hamilton

Tue 7th Jul 2015 21:54

"Is full of people but devoid of life" is my favourite line out of this piece. I enjoyed reading the whole from start to finish

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Stu Buck

Fri 3rd Jul 2015 16:36

Thanks all! I find the seaside wonderfully evocative and always find it beautiful, even in its sadness. Your comments more than make up for the stale doughnuts!

David, like the song and have to say i only listened to queen of denmark fleetingly when it came out, but am enjoying it again today thanks to you. later work became overly reliant on electronics for me, but his debut is great.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 3rd Jul 2015 15:05

This work requires the reader's dedicated effort to appreciate the fine points so expertly developed in your chosen imagery. An excellent development of disparate, associated ideas.

<Deleted User> (13947)

Thu 2nd Jul 2015 23:48

I know this will sound ridiculous considering how sad this whole piece is. But I was saddened most that you and your daughter's doughnuts were stale. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.

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