The Feminine Beauty
The Feminine Beauty
In every child a light
Defying Keats shines, and every
Cradle hides the light, keeps away from those
Beholden by blind deceitful eyes, but
Deeper still,
The child beneath the baby blues.
A chalice of strength invokes
A Mothers aspirations an affirmation
Of her soul and back and forth,
The nurture – nature proves
The bond a man can only fumble,
And humbled, the man looks
On in awe as infant grows.
Tumble down a mountain!
Walk back up again if limbs can steal
The pull, and begin the dereliction.
Duty bound the loyalty forgives,
Yet fire persists the scalding
And balding, she passed away too
Quick for truths to be exposed.
2.
When the child that thieves
The visionary for reality begs upon
The breast, remember the wish,
For clever cries insist upon
Lactation –
And as the child snuffles
Snuggles closely to the teat,
Puzzled by the need,
Keep in mind one day a separation,
As the moments goes too soon.
Too quickly!
Quick the days pass as
Mother Nature tends her young,
While the womb creates the karmic
Energies for the man to glorify his creed,-
Yet, inside, the worry grows of
Whom the child will be,
The first five not always kind,
Not always ‘ours’ to mould.
Salt tears laden with love
Bless the man for whom nine months;
Tended this woman,
For nine months lay inside
His mother –
Now,
His masculinity not needed,
The child with the baby blues fed
And grown from miniscule of seed,
He returns a simple favour.
And with these sad lonely
Tears of sacrifice; his self redundant beyond
Conviction,
He walks the mountain
Again
‘His’ child, ‘His’ wife,
Never far from thought of what
Was once,
A Glorious Dream.
Michael J Waite
garside
Thu 11th Jun 2009 09:06
Hi Mike - i like this poem - it has internal energy that drives it on.
like this -
Tumble down a mountain!
Walk back up again if limbs can steal
The pull, and begin the dereliction.
Duty bound the loyalty forgives,
Yet fire persists the scalding
And balding, she passed away too
Quick for truths to be exposed.
I would perhaps consider looking at strengthening the lines by moving some of the end words onto the next line - a friend offered me this advice recently and I appreciate the shift that this can produce when scripting a poem eg -
In every child a light
Defying Keats shines, and every
Cradle hides the light, keeps away from those
Beholden by blind deceitful eyes, but
Deeper still,
The child beneath the baby blues.
i think each line is made stronger and thus more active if -
In every child a light
Defying Keats shines,
And every cradle
Hides the light;
Keeps away from those
Beholden by blind deceitful eyes,
But deeper still,
The child beneath the baby blues.
steve x