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Warrior

Four by four

No less

No more

His aspirations

Sign written

In silver

 

Window down

Papers released

Doves with

No peace

Smeared and

Laden with

Deep fried

Grease

Crash land on

The street

 

He pans

For gold

In the homes

Of the old

Affording more

Charm

To hang

On the arm

 

Which feeds

The hand

That slightly

Squeezes

The beak

Pecking 

The nest egg

Feast 

 

His hand

Will guide

Her down

To show her

More charm

 

Whilst his

Other hand

Handles the

Wheel

 

Something

Is missing

Along this 

Concrete path

Of his green

And pleasant land

 

It's a tow rope

And his nigger

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Stu Buck

Sat 10th Oct 2015 12:57

there is something captivating about using so few words per line but filling each one with so much meaning and emotion. quite apart from the words, which are excellent and others have perfectly critiqued, i adore the minimalism of your work. taking the poem and pasting it into a word document with the text aligned to centre produces an almost crystalline drip of words and letters. it really is lovely. hope you dont mind that i did that by the way, far be it for me to alter someones work but i just wanted to see what happened. and it was good!

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Ria Richardson

Sat 10th Oct 2015 07:40

Love your writing Lynn

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Martin Elder

Fri 9th Oct 2015 22:29

Well said Lynn. I like it a lot. I also like the sparseness of the words.
Nice one

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