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THE DAY THE CLOUDS CAME

I could have been in a trench

looking up at tanks passing

their underbellies squatting

 

so it was the day the clouds came

tumbling fusing in great clumps of air

boisterous blustering

towards a thin horizon

      with a hatred of the light.

 

I pleaded with them,     finally

they promised not to come back

      that night.

 

clouds and weather

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Martin Elder

Thu 19th Nov 2015 19:29

A powerful piece Ray. I particularly like the line 'with a hatred of light'

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raypool

Thu 19th Nov 2015 15:40

Thanks PLG.

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Patricio LG

Thu 19th Nov 2015 14:47

Surreal Ray, very heavy, almost as if one could touch them.

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