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To drift

To drift

All my days have numbers,

and every day is numbered –

if I give each day a number.

Each second follows minute,

every minute follows hour,

the numbers don’t get smaller

I just rattle in my shell;

a shell inside a shell,

Like a Russian doll of shells.

My defence is superficial

to the shell that is my skin,

then the shell that was a person

can be found somewhere inside.

My feet are tied by gravity.

my lifespan’s tied by telomeres,

my future’s tied to tealeaves

and every day is numbered –  

if I give each day a number.

If I give each day a number

it will take away the day.

Wherever I might find myself:

in house in car in work;

I’m a Russian doll of empty,

rattling in a shell.

And I list ninety-seven reasons

to despise all human nature

but never feel the urge to

invent three to make a hundred.

◄ Patterns in darkness

Some days, I am comforted by quietly despairing ►

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DG

Thu 6th May 2010 23:00

Les quatre vers finale ont derivé d'un démarche intellectuelle différent que le reste de ce poème. J'ai écrit les autres vers aprés une conversation, qui cependant je m'ai senti détaché par le reste du monde. Les quatre vers prochain ont arrivé quand j'ai consideré pourquoi.

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Francine

Thu 6th May 2010 22:25

D'accord... Maintenant je comprends tout !
Euh... pas vraiment... mais je te comprends, et ça c'est déjà quelque chose n'est-ce pas ?

Hmmm... Mystic Ted gave me a really good review recently ; )

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DG

Tue 4th May 2010 19:42

Francine, I think that really the urge to round up to one hundred is the biggy that would be the aspect of human nature that, if I had to pick just one and say despise all human nature for this one reason alone, that would probably be it.

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DG

Tue 4th May 2010 19:36

well... sometimes, I am comforted by quietly despairing.

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Tue 4th May 2010 07:58

You need to cheer up, get some medication and take Mystic Ted more seriously

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Chris Dawson

Tue 4th May 2010 07:16

Lots of interesting concepts, not sure about the poem, Mr Shrodinger. The numbers never add up, and time is just a an artificial construct anyway. Telomeres don't tie your life up, they just stop it from going wonky round the edges (some of us less effectively than others!); and a future tied to tealeaves ... are you trying to say you just gotta picka pocket or two? If you keep on looking for meaning in the completely arbitrary you'll end up finding god you know! ... and THEN where will you be?
;-)
Cx

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Francine

Tue 4th May 2010 03:10

Alors... J'attends toujours une réponse...
Tu sais que je suis patiente, mais quand même !

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Francine

Sun 28th Jun 2009 18:55

I would be interested to know your ninety seven reasons DG...
Tu peux me faire confiance... je ne dirai à personne ; )

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